IELTS雅思寫作範文:提高道路安全途徑是嚴懲違規

  習作一篇:  Topic It's the only way to improve the satety on our roads that give much strict pu

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  習作一篇:

  Topic It's the only way to improve the satety on our roads that give much strict punishment to driving offence.Are you agree that

  題目問的是:你贊同還是反對——提高道路安全的唯一途徑是嚴懲駕駛違規行為。如果你贊同,你就必須證明嚴懲駕駛違規行為是唯一途徑;如果你反對,則要證明嚴懲駕駛違規行為不是唯一途徑。注意審題,不然很容易偏題。我的立場是贊同。

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  1.正是因為處罰輕,使得違規駕駛的肇事司機喪無視他人生命及安全,只有嚴懲,才能防止違規駕駛,確保道路安全。論據:2004年中國大中城市交通事故報告顯示:事故原因有80%由違規駕駛所致。大多數司機的安全意識很淡薄。

  2.近年來政府加大交通安全的宣傳力度,但收效甚微,違規駕駛現象高居不下,只有嚴懲才能起到殺雞殺儆候之效

  3.以新加坡為例,法律嚴明,交通事故率極低。

  The issue of how to improve the safety on roads has always been the focus of much attention.people come up with various solutionsbut some emphasize that the only feasible way is to give strict punishment to driving offence.PersonallyI share these people's point of view.

  It is much lesser punishment that makes those hit-and-run drivers devoid of the reverence for other people's life and close attention to road safety.——topic sentence An authoritative traffic analysis reporting indicates that approximately 80% of traffic accidents result from driving offence which occured in large and medium cities in China during the second half of 2004 and the rest of traffic accidents are due to bad weather and poor quality of automobile. These statistics show that most automobile drivers lack the consciousness of safe driving.They deserve severe legal punishment.Only after stricter punishment is carried out can driving offence decrease.

  In recent yearsthe Chinese government intensify efforts to publicize safe driving and traffic rules by the mass mediai.e. TV and radio newspapersmagazines)。But that has very little effect on reducing driving offence.Thereforeit's time to beat the dog before the lion Only strict punishment can play a role of a serious warning to those reckless drivers.

  Take an Asian country Singapore for instance.Singapore is well-known for its extremely stric trffic law worldwide.Those who break the traffic rules must be severely punished.Without the supervision of traffic policean extraordinarily low rate of traffic accidents has been kept for yearswhich totally attributes to local people's following the traffic rules.

  Undoubtedlyimproving the unsafe traffic situation is the most vital thing these days.I firmly hold the view that giving strict punishment to driving offence is the unique practicable solution.

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  呵呵,好累啊,相當於又寫了一篇作文。下面我就談談我的寫作體會吧。

  第一,相信有許多人都象初學寫作的我那時一樣,通常愛犯的一個毛病就是亂用詞,亂造句,凡是自己知道的詞就都往上寫,生怕考官不知道你的詞彙量有多大,凡是能用中文說的句子就想當然得翻譯成英文。我還記得我第一次考之前拿著一篇我自以為寫得不錯的文章給一個老外看,結果他的評價是他根本就不知道我在寫什麼!他說如果一篇文章裡有兩到三個他看不懂的句子他就一定不會給這篇文章好分!因此建議大家不要一味得把提高作文成績的寶壓在單詞上,我上面的文章大家也看到了,有什麼難詞好詞麼?沒有!我覺得真正讓你得高分的是你的邏輯結構和語言表達的清楚程度,思維一定要清晰,不要想到哪說到哪,語言不必刻意追求華麗,但一定要清楚明白。當然了,寫作過程沖的語法錯誤是很致命的,英語基礎不好的人一定要儘量避免寫過長的從句,倒裝句等等。我個人認為,只要你能做到我以上寫的三點,邏輯清楚,語言簡單明瞭,很少語法錯誤,那麼即使你只有高中的英語水準,打六也是絕對不成問題的。

  第二,關於背誦範文的事。我曾經背過新東方和吳建業的範文,我不能說效果不好,我只能說他們的範文大致上只適合兩種人,第一,寫作基礎很差想靠背模版純應試的人,第二,記憶力超強能把那些好詞難句都記下來在考場上默寫的人。呵呵,我寫到這裡可能要被人扔番茄了,我絕對沒有任何對這兩位老師不恭的意思,事實上何剛老師是我非常喜愛的老師之一,我只是想說,他們的書已經被太多的人背誦和模仿,他們只會使你更加深陷雅思的套路之中,如果你的目標是六,那你大可以去放心得背它們,但如果你的目標是七,我建議你省下背雅思作文的時間去背一背那寫經典的外國人寫的東西,比如新概念。一旦你背得足夠多,量變導致成質變,你就行成了那種SENSE,這是非常重要的,我第二次考鴨之前用半個月的時間背了足有三十篇專家寫的地道的雅思作文,於是背完之後我就有了這種SENSE,考了兩回都是七,我不是開玩笑,我說的都是我的親身經歷。這不管對應付雅思考試很重要,這對於你出國之後經常被要求寫兩三千字的ESSAY的時候也是受益終生的。

  第三,這段有做廣告的嫌疑,在我第一次考試作文打了五之後,我在我們英語系找了一個從美國留學回來的老師給我改作文。這非常有效,要知道你一周寫七篇作文,要是沒有任何長進,這種努力是毫無意義的,它不符合收穫與付出成正比這一學說,因為這只會讓你把五分或者六分的作文寫得更加嫺熟而已,僅此而已。但是如果你能夠仔細的修改一篇,仔細分析你的不足之處,那樣你的作文水準才會真的有長進。因此我強烈建議大家在每次寫一篇新文章之前都能找人改過自己的上一篇文章,而且至少背過一篇範文。

  說了這麼多,也都只是我個人的一些關於寫作的看法,今天時間太匆忙,以後想到什麼再補充吧,我上面有提到的我找的那個老師總共給我寫了有五十篇左右的範文,雖然我還沒有得到他的同意,但是有想看一下的同學可以先把郵箱留下來,得到他的同意後我就會儘快發給大家,祝大家好運!

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